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Below-The-Zone
3A031/ Knowledge Operations Manager

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Winning Nomination for 4Q 2009









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LEADERSHIP AND PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES
- #1 of 570; selected Wg Amn of the Yr '08; Gp/Sq 3x Amn of Qtr, Gp C&I Annual Awd, Alamo Chptr AFA '08
- Filled O-3 67 NWG/CCE during 2-wk absence; managed $160K TDY budget, tracked all tasks--lauded by CC
- Selected by CC from pool of four--first-only 3A for Sq; single-handedly built entire admin prgm--2-person job
- Maintained Gp/Sq comp maintenance plan; responsible for $415K IT inventory--reutilization saved AF $78K
- Managed robust Gp TEMPEST pgm; prep'd 150 AIS's/three nets for AFISRA insp--pgm praised, zero findings
- Replaced 99 PCs/9 laptops/20 monitors; $180K DRMO turn-in prep'd; follow-on accountability insp 100%
- Responsible! Gp/Sq Gov Purchase Card rep; managed $43K account--zero discrepancies during recent audit
- College intern summer prgm lead; set-up lodging, transport, office space for 10 interns--Wg/CC awarded LOA
- Built EPR/Dec Dbase; tracked 76 Amn, 40 Decs, 50 EPR's--elevated 26/67 OSS suspense fulfillment to 100%
- Single-handedly stood-up Sq CSE during AF-wide MPS activation--E-6 posn; uninterrupted customer support
- Created Sq task tracker; deftly tracked/oversaw resolution of 100+ tasks--100% Wg/Gp suspenses met on-time

SELF-IMPROVEMENT INITIATIVES:
- Earned 12 semester hrs toward BS in Human Resource Mgmt; sustained 3.8 GPA--applied skills to daily tasks
- Completed 5-level upgrade trng in eight months; fulfilled DoD '09 IA 100% cert requirement & CSA certified

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Honor Guard mbr; devoted 240 hrs; 8 veterans recv'd funeral honors--personified impeccable professionalism
- Championed dorm QoL initiative; briefed 0-6; obtained $5K for dayroom upgrades--enhanced lives of 82 Amn

Acronyms:
AIS - Automated Information System
C&I - Communications & Information
CSA - Client Support Administrator
CSE - Commander's Support Element
FOIA - Freedom of Information Act
IA - Information Assurance
MPS - Military Personnel Section
PA - Privacy Act
QoL - Quality of Life
 

Note:
Very good BTZ package.  All of the bullets were easily measureable against peer groups.  Couple of things a winning BTZ package has regularly.  College, Honor Guard and Leadership! If a airman wants to be highly competitive in the BTZ process and stand out as the top 15% those three things will surely help.


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