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Below-The-Zone
2E231/Network Infrastructure Technician

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Winning Nomination for 1Q 2009









Key Points to Writing
  • WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
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  • The only person looking out for your subordinates is YOU!
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LEADERSHIP AND PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES
- APEC msn linchpin; built dep comms cafe for 300+ aircrew--spt'd CINC regional air def--12AF/CCM coined!
- Prep'd UTC for CJTF msn; cmplt'd 53 pre-dep checks--facilitated 1st ever electronic warfare on FARC rebels
- Dep to USSOUTHCOM's lrgst Ex; est'd DISN C2 for 20 nations/7K forces--spt'd land/air/sea def of Pan Canal
- Led inaugural lean UTC setup--cut footprint 50%; drove concept tst; passed air pic via P2P radio freq--Sq 1st!
- Evacuated 8 aircraft from hangar fire--svd $2M; initiated EAP--secured $2.5M comms/restored FMC in 1/2 hr
- Diligently tackled ADPE inventory--scoured 200 items/recovered 16 missing assets--mitigated RoS/svd $15K
- Extended Ex ANGEL THUNDER air pic--laid 1K ft cable-- fired up 30+ CSAR sorties, 1st joint DoD/DoJ Ex
- Anchored Ex team; engaged in 18-day tactical comm test--showcased JITC concepts--DISA/CC praised efforts
- Recognized excellence--coined by 12 AF/CC, 612 ACOMS/CC; selected Flt, Amn Prof Performer, 3rd Qtr 08'

TRAINING, EDUCATION AND SELF-IMPROVEMENT EFFORTS
- Finished tech school w/96%--awd'd DG! Crushed CDC exams--92% avg; raced to 5-lvl--finished 4 mos early
- Certified 40-hr Avaya phone switch crs; graduated 32-hr Net Mgt trng; led/trn'd 8--69 tasks--surged quals 38%
- Mastered 3-wk AETC multiplexer trng; 120 hrs tactical voice module class; earned 6 CCAF hrs math/spanish

OTHER ACCOMPLISHMENTS
- Role model! Mentored 8 HS teens/50-hrs--superior example; wired church LAN--16-hrs/negated $400 in fees
- Palletized 54K lbs in < 3hrs--broke Food Bank 1-day record; pgk'd 2.5T of supplies--key to Ecuador relief pjt
- Zealous volunteer! Gave 40 hrs, built $9K Heritage deck--Sq morale boost; 9-hrs to Amn Attic/CAC functions

ACRONYMS USED

 


AAS - Associate in Applied Science
APEC - Asia-Pacific Economic Cooperation
C2 - Command and Control
CAC - Community Activities Center
CSAR - Combat Search and Rescue
Dep - Deployed/Deployment 
DISA - Defense Information Systems Agency
DISN - Defense Information Systems Network
EAP - Emergency Action Procedures
Elec Sys Tech - Electronic Systems Technology
FARC - Revolutionary Armed Forces of Colombia
FMC - Full Mission-Capable
JITC - Joint Interoperability Test Command
LAN - Local Area Network
P2P - Point to Point
Pan - Panama
RoS - Report of Survey
UTC - Unit Type Code
DoJ - Department of Justice
 

Note:
Very good BTZ package.  All of the bullets were easily measureable against peer groups.  This is what it takes for airman to do well at BTZ.  Each line must have significant impact and results.  Leadership ability is vitial for an A1C to be recognized as the top 15%.


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