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Below-The-Zone
2E131 / Satellite/Wideband Comm Apprentice

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Winning Nomination for 2Q 2008









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LEADERSHIP AND PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES
- Sq "Mx Technician" 4th Qtr '07--lauded by Chmn House Armed Services Comittee for static display set up
- Flawlessly shipped 5 UTC’s/60 tons of cargo--zero inspection write-ups--enabled 90-day Humanitarian msn
- Crushed trng standard--100% UTC qualified/completed CDC's w/89% avg--5-lvl upgrade in 9 mos vs 12 mos
- Led legacy SATCOM equip turn-in--inventoried/PMI'd/overhauled 360 items--$5.9M returned to AF supply
- Shift lead for 15-day satellite system test--ensured joint platform compatibility--new $454.8M DoD initiative
- Created AF mobility/mx standard for new comm terminal--enabled first-ever deployment of $4.7M equipment
- Mng'd corrosion control prgm/26 historical files/350+ tech manuals--qualified 29 Amn--flawless inspections
- Repaired 5 mx issues in-house--saved $42K in depot costs--equipment msn ready < 1 wk for DoD-wide test
- Trained 18 Amn on 52 equip tasks--hands-on instruction for 15 classes--increased workcenter coverage 68%

SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT
- Completed 43 credit hrs towards CCAF degree in Electronic Sys Tech--CLEP'd two addt'l classes/6 credit hrs
- Green rope in tech school--led/marched/PT'd/inspected 150 students--instructed 300+ Amn in combative skills
- Read book on CSAF reading list--attended PT leader training--honed knowledge/skills in combat leadership

BASE AND COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT
- Coached 50 games across 4 sports--earned 118 CC Trophy points for Sq--Sq UAC/dorm council rep for 815
- Stellar volunteer--donated 55 hrs to Habitat for Humanity/Meals on Wheels--raised $7K for Sq booster club
- Critical during ice storm--cleared 2K lbs of tree debris--enabled cots/heat/shelter for 50 families without pwr
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CC - Commander
CCAF - Community College of the Air Force
CDC - Career Development Course
CLEP - College-Level Examination Program
CSAF - Chief of Staff of the Air Force
PMI - Preventive Maintenance Inspection
PT - Physical Training
SATCOM - Satellite Communication
UAC - Unit Advisory Council
UTC - Unit Type Code


Note:
Very good BTZ package.  Leadership was captured through who and how many were trained.There are a couple of things that stand out. 

  • The person read a book from the CSAF reading list

  • Dorm council rep - there isn't enough people sitting in these positions normally that do so for the right reasons

  • Continual volunteer accomplishments 


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